Monday, October 26, 2015

Extended Annotated Bibliography

Carly Fiorina rockets to No. 2 behind Donald Trump - CNNPolitics.com. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.


David A. Graham,Yoni Appelbaum,Molly Ball,Russell Berman,Priscilla Alvarez,Conor Friedersdorf,Tyler Bishop,Marina Koren,Matt Ford. (2015, September 16). Who Won the Second Republican Presidential Debate? Retrieved October 27, 2015.


Donald Trump made one shockingly insightful comment during the first GOP debate. (2015, August 6). Retrieved October 27, 2015.


First GOP Debate: Donald Trump, and Other Memor\able Moments. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.


GOP Debate 2015 Summary: Donald Trump, Immigration, Iran Deal Impact Prime-Time Republican Debate. (2015, September 16). Retrieved October 27, 2015.


GOP debate: Biggest winners, losers (Opinions) - CNN.com. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.

www.cnn.com/2015/08/07/opinions/opinion-gop-debate-roundup/

Quealy, K., & Cox, A. (2015, July 20). The First G.O.P. Debate: Who’s In, Who’s Out and the Role of Chance. Retrieved October 27, 2015.


Voorhees, J. (n.d.). Lindsey Graham Won CNN’s First GOP Debate. It Wasn’t Close. Retrieved October 27, 2015.


Vote Now: Who Won the First Republican Presidential Debate? (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.


 

 

"9.3 Final Submission and Reflection on Proejct 2"


The Donald Trump Show

 

            The first Republican debate was held in Cleveland, Ohio, and televised on Fox News. However if you looked at your TV guide, it might have said the Donald Trump Show instead of the first Republican Debate. Trump seemed to own everyone in the room, the audience, the moderator, and even the millions of people watching from home. During the debate, it became very easy to forget that there were nine other candidates on stage. Ironically, Trump was positioned in the center of the stage. The nine other candidates had all prepared speeches and practiced answering the moderator’s questions, but it seemed like everyone was fixated on Donald Trump, but is this one man show for better or for worse?

            Trump immediately stood out by being the only person on stage to say that he is not scared to run without the Republican Party and would run as an Independent. Trump also used facial expressions as if he were bored and disgusted by the points being made against him by the other candidates. This type of behavior is without question rude and childish, but it seemed that the audience and millions of people on social media loved it. Kentucky Senator Rand Paul stressed that,” Trump buys and sells politicians of all stripes”. Donald Trump responded,” I’ve given him plenty of money”. The audience erupted as well as did social media. Trump was dodging the accusations being made against him by sticking to him usual niche of humor.

            21 minutes had gone by without the spotlight being on Trump and he absolutely made sure that this spotlight came back to him. Moderator Megyn Kelly pointed out the fact that Trump is demeaning towards women. “You’ve called women, that you don’t like, fat pigs, dogs, slobs, and disgusting animals”, Megyn Kelly exclaimed. Trump interrupted her while she was talking and said,” Only Rosie O’Donell”, this remark was followed by a quick smirk and a spike in social media. Once again Trump had dodged a point being made against him by using his rude and crude humor. He followed that remark up with,” I think a big problem in this country is being politically correct”.

            However, the testiest moment of the night shockingly did not involve Donald Trump. Instead it involved New Jersey Governor Chris Christie and Kentucky Senator Rand Paul. The argument was about the NSA’s bulk data collection, which Christie supports and Paul does not. Rand Paul came out looking like the winner of this argument by trying to compromise Christie’s intelligence and by showing that Paul does not support President Obama. “You fundamentally misunderstand the Bill of Rights. I do not trust President Obama with our records, I know you gave him a big hug and if you want to give him a big hug again, go right ahead”, said Paul. This caused the audience to erupt with approval and clapping for Rand Paul. Christie tried to use sympathy to get him out of this argument and it didn’t seem to work, he said, “I remember giving hugs to people who lost their families on September 11th”.

            After the debate was finished there were some different opinions of how well the debate went for Trump. Matthew Dowd, senior strategic advisor, thought that Trump has hurt himself in this debate. Dowd stated that," Trump had momentum coming into the debate, but over a course of two hours, I think it wore thin. I think any momentum he had coming into tonight has stopped.  He made a few errors in some of his engagements tonight with the moderators”. Mel Robbins of CNN did not agree with Dowd. She said,” The debate is over and Trump is still winning. He dominated the polls leading into the debate, he dominated pre-bate commentary, and he was the only candidate that the press greeted when he arrived in Ohio. No one else was memorable.” Dowd also thought that the winner of the debate was John Kasich, Governor of Ohio. Kasich did seem to be the most mature and answered his questions nicely and didn’t involve himself in the Trump Show. Kasich also had the best line of the night, when asked about gay marriage, he replied,” God loves me unconditionally, therefore, I’m going to love my family and my friends unconditionally.”

            It is very interesting to look at and analyze the strategies being used by different candidates. Look at Trump and the strategy he used when talking, he appealed to the audience through humor. Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents. Chris Christie tried using sympathy to win some applause from the audience, which didn’t really work. These three different candidates are using different strategies when speaking in the debate and it is important to recognize and understand those strategies so that you are not fooled by their words. Also it is hard to tell which strategy is most useful. I think you would have to look into the statistics of the debate in order to find out.

            The debate set a record for most viewers, with 24 million. Carly Fiorina emerged into 2nd place right behind Donald Trump. Trump’s strategy brought him a lot of attention, but was it negative? The polls say negative. Trump lost support, he was at 32% support and now at 24%. So it seems like the experts are split on whether or not Trump helped or hurt himself and the polls say that he did hurt himself but somehow is still #1. Whether or not he helped himself or not, Trump accomplished his mission of turning the first GOP Debate of 2015 to the Trump show.

 

 



 
Work Cited

 

Carly Fiorina rockets to No. 2 behind Donald Trump - CNNPolitics.com. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.

First GOP Debate: Donald Trump, and Other Memor\able Moments. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.

GOP debate: Biggest winners, losers (Opinions) - CNN.com. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.

 

"9.2 Clarity, Part 2"

I chose to read about choosing appropriate language, tighten wordy sentences, and key ideas.

1. After reading, it is critical to chose the correct/appropriate language to use when writing. You wouldn't write using the same language if you were discussing children's books to political speeches. For my writing, I think it would be wise to choose a very professional manner of writing.

It is very interesting to look at and analyze the strategies being used by different candidates.
Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents.

2. I chose to read about tightening wordy sentences, due to the fact that I often have run-ons. I need to shorten the sentences so that only valid information is in the sentence, which leads into my next point of emphasizing key ideas.

Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents.

3. I chose this one because it seemed to go with tighten wordy sentences pretty well. Like the last point, it is important to have key/main ideas in the writing and really focus/emphasize on those points.


I learned that if you implement these strategies into your writing, you're writing will be that much stronger. I noticed my writing was easier to follow and more entertaining than before.

Monday, October 19, 2015

"8.2 Reflection on Project 2 Draft"

I reviewed Felicia Maldonado's draft.

I chose her draft because it was about police officers and their force more specifically. Which I found very interesting because my father is a police officer. I do not necessarily agree that the majority of police officers abuse their force. I would say that the majority of police officers I have met in my life are honest, good men. Throughout history there has been cases where police officers have abused their force and I understand that, I just don't think that this is the consensus among law enforcement. For some reason I was not able to comment on her draft, I don't know if that was on my end or not. 

"8.1 Clarity Pt.1"

1. I've always felt that I needed to work on my work choice. So with that being said, I chose add needed words as my first topic. Word choice helps engage the readers and can really captivate them with your writing. I've noticed that I tend to leave out words due to me trying to rush my writing. This makes my writing very confusing to readers and I need to work on adding the needed words to get my point across adequately.

2. I need to add some variety to my writing. After reading the topic, I learned about simple, complex, and compound sentences and how I can use them to enhance my writing skills.

3. The last one I chose was prefer active verbs. I always use non-active words in my writing and I really need to strengthen my writing with active verbs. Active verbs can really give some life and meaning to sentences.


Reflection:
I learned that I am not the only one who struggles with writing. Everyone has some type of struggle. For me it's adding needed words, adding variety, and active verbs. But everyone is different and many student had similar issues but not all.

Saturday, October 10, 2015

Deadline 7: Weekly Learning Reflections

I looked at other students thesis statements to try to get a feel for what mine should look like. I still do not feel like any of my thesis statement examples are good, but it will be improved. Writing the perfect thesis statement is actually very hard. As we progress through the project, my thesis will improve.

I commented on Anthony Saito

Deadline 6: Weekly Learning Reflection

This deadline made me aware of the strategies used when giving a public speech, whether its to make the audience feel someway or to get a certain reaction. This week we went over rhetorical strategies and how to spot those rhetorical strategies in our own readings.

“7.4 Draft Thesis Statements.”

1. Donald Trump undermines his fellow candidates, without very many credible sources and/or statistics.
2. Donald Trump replies on tricks to gaining the popular vote among U.S. citizens.
3. Donald Trump undermines his opponents by continuously talks about his business success, claiming the other candidates cannot run his businesses the way he can.


This was kind of tough, I don't know if my examples are good. I just want it to be the best that it can be but doing so is sort of difficult. Obviously the thesis is not final, it will be revised and finalized as we progress through the project.

“7.3 Analyzing My Audience for Project 2.”

1. Who am I writing for? What are the audience's beliefs and assumptions?
 
The audience is America. They value what is best for them and their country.
 
2. What position might they take on this issue? How will I need to respond to this position? 

People obviously will like different candidates and will respond differently to every speaker.
3. What will they want to know? 
They will want to know what the candidates plan is for different issues around the country. 

4. How might they react to my argument? 
 
People might react positively or negatively to my argument, it is based primarily on their preconceived notion of candidate Donald Trump.
 
5. How am I trying to relate to or connect with my audience? 
I am just trying to show how the speakers try to win the debates and what strategies they use. I would like my audience to take what I have said and use that when watching other debates and be wary of the strategies.
 
6. Are there specific words, ideas, or modes of presentation that will help me relate to them in this way? 
I think by using the word "us"/"America"/"home" it may help me connect to the audience.

“7.2 Cluster of 2015 GOP Debate”

This cluster is to give a brief summary of the first 2015 GOB Debate. I chose to only analyze/focus of Donald Trumps speech/debate.

Saturday, October 3, 2015

"6.7 Analyzing Rhetorical Strategies inFederal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name"

Appeals to Credibility or Character:

 The author used credible sources as references and for statements. Thus, adding to his credibility.

Appeals to Emotion: 

 The author wants to make you feel sympathetic to the Native American community who is calling for change. He does a very good job of this by stating their values and beliefs and explains how it offends the tribe.


Appeals to Logic:

The author tries to appeal to emotion more than logic. Yes, he does do a good job of stating how wrong it is to offend another race but I believe he did a better job appealing to emotion.

"6.6 Aanlyzing Message in Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name"

1. Express idea or opinion:
The author is trying to express the opinion of why the name should be changed.2. Inform the reader about a topic that is often misunderstood:
The author is trying to show why the Native American community wants the name to be changed.3. Persuade an audience of something? 
The author is trying to persuade the readers to join in on the side of changing the name.
4. Change:
The author is trying to persuade you to call for change
5. Feel a certain way:
Wants to make you sympathize with the Native American community.

"6.5 Analyzing My Own Assumptions"

1. What cultural or social values, beliefs, etc., do we share with the society or culture in which the text was written? Why have they endured?
I think all people can relate to being courteous, aware, and understanding of offending someone especially when it comes to their race. That is something people are very touchy about in today's world and I think we can all relate.
 2. What cultural or social values, beliefs, etc., do we not share? Why not? 
I don't believe that we can necessarily say that we don't share any values that the article is talking about.
 3. If the text is written in a culture distant or different from our own, what social values, beliefs, etc., connect to or reflect our own culture? What social values,beliefs, etc., can we not see in our own culture?
I believe that is it a pretty common social value/standard to be wary of the things you say and do so that you do not offend another person. 
4. If the text is written in our culture but in a different historical time, how have social values, beliefs, etc., developed or changed over time?
 I think if it was written in a different time period, more specifically the past, people might not care as much about the issue. It is not a bold statement to say that people are more racially wary than the past.

"6.4 Analyzing Audience in Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name"

I think the target audience is anyone who is interested in the matter. With that being said I could absolutely see this article particularly being for men as well since it does have to do with football and that is the main target audience of football.

"6.2 Cultural Analysis of Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow to Redskins Team Name"

1. Previewing-
2. Skim for cultural references- Article does make cultural references involving the Native American nation.
3. Skim for cultural values- Article does display the values of the opposing Native American nation.


After re-reading the article I was able to understand the cultural references and values that it was displaying. The author talks about how and why the team name is offensive to Native Americans.