Unnecessary Comma: I have been told, time and time again, that I use unnecessary commas frequently. So I obviously chose this topic. It helped a bit, showing when and when not to use a comma.
Comma: I thought I could use a little more work on my comma usage, so I chose this topic. It again helped by showing how to specifically use a comma properly.
Reflection: I noticed a couple other students had also chosen to use comma and unnecessary comma as their topics. So it helped a little bit more, when reading other students posts.
Sunday, November 15, 2015
Sunday, November 8, 2015
"11.4 Paraphrasing a Source"
Original Source:
"In an open letter written earlier this month, Snyder said, "I respect the opinions of those who disagree. I want them to know that I do hear them, and I will continue to listen and learn. But we cannot ignore our 81 year history, or the strong feelings of most of our fans as well as Native Americans throughout the country. After 81 years, the team name ‘Redskins' continues to hold the memories and meaning of where we came from, who we are, and who we want to be in the years to come."
Should Washington's Football Team Change Its Name?
My Paraphrase:
Washington Redskin's owner, Dan Snyder has refused to change the name of his team. According to a letter written by Snyder, he is aware of the opinions if the Native Americans throughout the country and it respectful to those opinions. However, Snyder fears losing the 81 year tradition and culture of his team. "After 81 years, the team name ‘Redskins' continues to hold the memories and meaning of where we came from, who we are, and who we want to be in the years to come." (Snyder, U.S. News)
"In an open letter written earlier this month, Snyder said, "I respect the opinions of those who disagree. I want them to know that I do hear them, and I will continue to listen and learn. But we cannot ignore our 81 year history, or the strong feelings of most of our fans as well as Native Americans throughout the country. After 81 years, the team name ‘Redskins' continues to hold the memories and meaning of where we came from, who we are, and who we want to be in the years to come."
Should Washington's Football Team Change Its Name?
My Paraphrase:
Washington Redskin's owner, Dan Snyder has refused to change the name of his team. According to a letter written by Snyder, he is aware of the opinions if the Native Americans throughout the country and it respectful to those opinions. However, Snyder fears losing the 81 year tradition and culture of his team. "After 81 years, the team name ‘Redskins' continues to hold the memories and meaning of where we came from, who we are, and who we want to be in the years to come." (Snyder, U.S. News)
"11.3 Outlining My Public Argument"
I chose to use "Connect the Issue to Your Audience's World View." I thought it would be the most appropriate for my topic. I will briefly discuss the controversy and provide an overview. Then I will give the points of both the opposition and my side. Then state a strong stance within the controversy and try to sway readers to reevaluate their own personal stance on the controversy. In my body paragraphs, I will go over my view in more detail and provide background of the team name. Then show some examples of others who share the same view as me. In my conclusion, I chose "Positive Consequences". I will describe the possible consequences of my view point and offer a compromise, ending with a brief summary of the controversy.
"10.7 Considering Types"
I have chosen to write a position argument for this topic. I think it would be the best fit due to the fact that I will de talking about/defending my own position on the Redskins name. I do not think causal, evaluative, or refutation arguments would work for this. However, I did think about writing a proposal argument since I am thinking about proposing a compromise in my argument.
"10.5 Analyzing Context"
1. Its about respect for another's culture and trying not to offend them. How to argue this issue without offending anyone is a big school of thought.
2. A major point for disagreements would be that the name, Redskins, is offensive to Native Americans.
3. I think both sides could argue that the name, Redskins, does involve the Native American people. Whether it is to offend or honor is up to each individual.
4. There are a few differences, mainly whether if the name is offensive or not. One group of people believe that the name should not be changed and does not in anyway offend Native Americans. While the other group believes it should be changed due to its offensive manner.
5. None of the articles that I have read has involved a compromise. Which is something I am leaning towards including into my argument. It seems like that may be the only solution to this debate.
6. My perspective is that the original owners named the team to honor a coach, who was Native American. Also I would like to bring up the fact that the team name has been the same for years and years, so why raise an issue about it now?
7. The greatest threat to my argument, hands down, would be that the name is offensive. My goal is to show that the name is not offensive.
2. A major point for disagreements would be that the name, Redskins, is offensive to Native Americans.
3. I think both sides could argue that the name, Redskins, does involve the Native American people. Whether it is to offend or honor is up to each individual.
4. There are a few differences, mainly whether if the name is offensive or not. One group of people believe that the name should not be changed and does not in anyway offend Native Americans. While the other group believes it should be changed due to its offensive manner.
5. None of the articles that I have read has involved a compromise. Which is something I am leaning towards including into my argument. It seems like that may be the only solution to this debate.
6. My perspective is that the original owners named the team to honor a coach, who was Native American. Also I would like to bring up the fact that the team name has been the same for years and years, so why raise an issue about it now?
7. The greatest threat to my argument, hands down, would be that the name is offensive. My goal is to show that the name is not offensive.
"10.4 Analyzing Purpose"
1. The goal for my argument is to convince readers that the Redskins football organization does not need to change their name. I would like to change people's opinion on the subject and show that the name is not as offensive as many think.
2. I think a likely result of my argument is people rethinking their stance. I think an unlikely result is people changing their view solely off of my writing. I am trying to open up people's minds/views on the subject.
3. A major consequence that could come from my argument is offending Native Americans. Obviously, offending anyone is not my purpose. I just want people to be aware of the meaning behind the name, Redskins.
4. I think my audience could be range of many different people. People involved/interested in business and sports would be the main two groups but I think there could be others as well. It seems like this issue has been blown out of proportion, thus making every day citizens interested in the matter.
3. A major consequence that could come from my argument is offending Native Americans. Obviously, offending anyone is not my purpose. I just want people to be aware of the meaning behind the name, Redskins.
4. I think my audience could be range of many different people. People involved/interested in business and sports would be the main two groups but I think there could be others as well. It seems like this issue has been blown out of proportion, thus making every day citizens interested in the matter.
"10.3 Learning for Project #3"
There is a lot to be learned from the assignment prompt/guidelines and readings . I think the biggest thing was learning the steps and guidelines for this next project.
Monday, October 26, 2015
Extended Annotated Bibliography
Carly Fiorina rockets to No. 2 behind Donald Trump
- CNNPolitics.com. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.
www.cnn.com/2015/08/07/opinions/opinion-gop-debate-roundup/
David A.
Graham,Yoni Appelbaum,Molly Ball,Russell Berman,Priscilla Alvarez,Conor
Friedersdorf,Tyler Bishop,Marina Koren,Matt Ford. (2015, September 16). Who Won
the Second Republican Presidential Debate? Retrieved October 27, 2015.
Donald Trump made one shockingly insightful comment
during the first GOP debate. (2015, August 6). Retrieved October 27, 2015.
First GOP Debate: Donald Trump, and Other
Memor\able Moments. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.
GOP Debate 2015 Summary: Donald Trump, Immigration,
Iran Deal Impact Prime-Time Republican Debate. (2015, September 16). Retrieved
October 27, 2015.
GOP debate: Biggest winners, losers (Opinions) -
CNN.com. (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.
www.cnn.com/2015/08/07/opinions/opinion-gop-debate-roundup/
Quealy, K., & Cox, A. (2015, July 20). The
First G.O.P. Debate: Who’s In, Who’s Out and the Role of Chance. Retrieved
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Voorhees, J. (n.d.). Lindsey Graham Won CNN’s First
GOP Debate. It Wasn’t Close. Retrieved October 27, 2015.
Vote Now: Who Won the First Republican Presidential
Debate? (n.d.). Retrieved October 27, 2015.
"9.3 Final Submission and Reflection on Proejct 2"
The Donald Trump
Show
The first Republican debate was held in Cleveland, Ohio, and televised on Fox
News. However if you looked at your TV guide, it might have said the Donald
Trump Show instead of the first Republican Debate. Trump seemed to own everyone
in the room, the audience, the moderator, and even the millions of people
watching from home. During the debate, it became very easy to forget that there
were nine other candidates on stage. Ironically, Trump was positioned in the
center of the stage. The nine other candidates had all prepared speeches and
practiced answering the moderator’s questions, but it seemed like everyone was
fixated on Donald Trump, but is this one man show for better or for worse?
Trump immediately stood out by being the only person on stage to say that he is
not scared to run without the Republican Party and would run as an Independent.
Trump also used facial expressions as if he were bored and disgusted by the
points being made against him by the other candidates. This type of behavior is
without question rude and childish, but it seemed that the audience and
millions of people on social media loved it. Kentucky Senator Rand Paul
stressed that,” Trump buys and sells politicians of all stripes”. Donald Trump
responded,” I’ve given him plenty of money”. The audience erupted as well as
did social media. Trump was dodging the accusations being made against him by
sticking to him usual niche of humor.
21 minutes had gone by without the spotlight being on Trump and he absolutely
made sure that this spotlight came back to him. Moderator Megyn Kelly pointed
out the fact that Trump is demeaning towards women. “You’ve called women, that
you don’t like, fat pigs, dogs, slobs, and disgusting animals”, Megyn Kelly
exclaimed. Trump interrupted her while she was talking and said,” Only Rosie
O’Donell”, this remark was followed by a quick smirk and a spike in social
media. Once again Trump had dodged a point being made against him by using his
rude and crude humor. He followed that remark up with,” I think a big problem
in this country is being politically correct”.
However, the testiest moment of the night shockingly did not involve Donald
Trump. Instead it involved New Jersey Governor Chris Christie and Kentucky
Senator Rand Paul. The argument was about the NSA’s bulk data collection, which
Christie supports and Paul does not. Rand Paul came out looking like the winner
of this argument by trying to compromise Christie’s intelligence and by showing
that Paul does not support President Obama. “You fundamentally misunderstand
the Bill of Rights. I do not trust President Obama with our records, I know you
gave him a big hug and if you want to give him a big hug again, go right
ahead”, said Paul. This caused the audience to erupt with approval and clapping
for Rand Paul. Christie tried to use sympathy to get him out of this argument
and it didn’t seem to work, he said, “I remember giving hugs to people who lost
their families on September 11th”.
After the debate was finished there were some different opinions of how well
the debate went for Trump. Matthew Dowd, senior strategic advisor, thought that
Trump has hurt himself in this debate. Dowd stated that," Trump had
momentum coming into the debate, but over a course of two hours, I think it
wore thin. I think any momentum he had coming into tonight has stopped.
He made a few errors in some of his engagements tonight with the moderators”.
Mel Robbins of CNN did not agree with Dowd. She said,” The debate is over and
Trump is still winning. He dominated the polls leading into the debate, he
dominated pre-bate commentary, and he was the only candidate that the press
greeted when he arrived in Ohio. No one else was memorable.” Dowd also thought
that the winner of the debate was John Kasich, Governor of Ohio. Kasich did
seem to be the most mature and answered his questions nicely and didn’t involve
himself in the Trump Show. Kasich also had the best line of the night, when
asked about gay marriage, he replied,” God loves me unconditionally, therefore,
I’m going to love my family and my friends unconditionally.”
It is very interesting to look at and analyze the strategies being used by
different candidates. Look at Trump and the strategy he used when talking, he
appealed to the audience through humor. Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning
the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents. Chris Christie tried using
sympathy to win some applause from the audience, which didn’t really work.
These three different candidates are using different strategies when speaking
in the debate and it is important to recognize and understand those strategies
so that you are not fooled by their words. Also it is hard to tell which
strategy is most useful. I think you would have to look into the statistics of
the debate in order to find out.
The debate set a record for most viewers, with 24 million. Carly Fiorina
emerged into 2nd place right behind Donald Trump. Trump’s strategy
brought him a lot of attention, but was it negative? The polls say negative.
Trump lost support, he was at 32% support and now at 24%. So it seems like the
experts are split on whether or not Trump helped or hurt himself and the polls
say that he did hurt himself but somehow is still #1. Whether or not he helped
himself or not, Trump accomplished his mission of turning the first GOP Debate
of 2015 to the Trump show.
Work Cited
Carly
Fiorina rockets to No. 2 behind Donald Trump - CNNPolitics.com. (n.d.).
Retrieved October 27, 2015.
First GOP
Debate: Donald Trump, and Other Memor\able Moments. (n.d.). Retrieved October
27, 2015.
GOP
debate: Biggest winners, losers (Opinions) - CNN.com. (n.d.). Retrieved October
27, 2015.
"9.2 Clarity, Part 2"
I chose to read about choosing appropriate language, tighten wordy sentences, and key ideas.
1. After reading, it is critical to chose the correct/appropriate language to use when writing. You wouldn't write using the same language if you were discussing children's books to political speeches. For my writing, I think it would be wise to choose a very professional manner of writing.
It is very interesting to look at and analyze the strategies being used by different candidates.
Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents.
2. I chose to read about tightening wordy sentences, due to the fact that I often have run-ons. I need to shorten the sentences so that only valid information is in the sentence, which leads into my next point of emphasizing key ideas.
Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents.
3. I chose this one because it seemed to go with tighten wordy sentences pretty well. Like the last point, it is important to have key/main ideas in the writing and really focus/emphasize on those points.
I learned that if you implement these strategies into your writing, you're writing will be that much stronger. I noticed my writing was easier to follow and more entertaining than before.
1. After reading, it is critical to chose the correct/appropriate language to use when writing. You wouldn't write using the same language if you were discussing children's books to political speeches. For my writing, I think it would be wise to choose a very professional manner of writing.
It is very interesting to look at and analyze the strategies being used by different candidates.
Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents.
2. I chose to read about tightening wordy sentences, due to the fact that I often have run-ons. I need to shorten the sentences so that only valid information is in the sentence, which leads into my next point of emphasizing key ideas.
Rand Paul tried attacking and demeaning the intelligence of his fellow candidates/opponents.
3. I chose this one because it seemed to go with tighten wordy sentences pretty well. Like the last point, it is important to have key/main ideas in the writing and really focus/emphasize on those points.
I learned that if you implement these strategies into your writing, you're writing will be that much stronger. I noticed my writing was easier to follow and more entertaining than before.
Monday, October 19, 2015
"8.2 Reflection on Project 2 Draft"
I reviewed Felicia Maldonado's draft.
I chose her draft because it was about police officers and their force more specifically. Which I found very interesting because my father is a police officer. I do not necessarily agree that the majority of police officers abuse their force. I would say that the majority of police officers I have met in my life are honest, good men. Throughout history there has been cases where police officers have abused their force and I understand that, I just don't think that this is the consensus among law enforcement. For some reason I was not able to comment on her draft, I don't know if that was on my end or not.
I chose her draft because it was about police officers and their force more specifically. Which I found very interesting because my father is a police officer. I do not necessarily agree that the majority of police officers abuse their force. I would say that the majority of police officers I have met in my life are honest, good men. Throughout history there has been cases where police officers have abused their force and I understand that, I just don't think that this is the consensus among law enforcement. For some reason I was not able to comment on her draft, I don't know if that was on my end or not.
"8.1 Clarity Pt.1"
1. I've always felt that I needed to work on my work choice. So with that being said, I chose add needed words as my first topic. Word choice helps engage the readers and can really captivate them with your writing. I've noticed that I tend to leave out words due to me trying to rush my writing. This makes my writing very confusing to readers and I need to work on adding the needed words to get my point across adequately.
2. I need to add some variety to my writing. After reading the topic, I learned about simple, complex, and compound sentences and how I can use them to enhance my writing skills.
3. The last one I chose was prefer active verbs. I always use non-active words in my writing and I really need to strengthen my writing with active verbs. Active verbs can really give some life and meaning to sentences.
Reflection:
I learned that I am not the only one who struggles with writing. Everyone has some type of struggle. For me it's adding needed words, adding variety, and active verbs. But everyone is different and many student had similar issues but not all.
2. I need to add some variety to my writing. After reading the topic, I learned about simple, complex, and compound sentences and how I can use them to enhance my writing skills.
3. The last one I chose was prefer active verbs. I always use non-active words in my writing and I really need to strengthen my writing with active verbs. Active verbs can really give some life and meaning to sentences.
Reflection:
I learned that I am not the only one who struggles with writing. Everyone has some type of struggle. For me it's adding needed words, adding variety, and active verbs. But everyone is different and many student had similar issues but not all.
Saturday, October 10, 2015
Deadline 7: Weekly Learning Reflections
I looked at other students thesis statements to try to get a feel for what mine should look like. I still do not feel like any of my thesis statement examples are good, but it will be improved. Writing the perfect thesis statement is actually very hard. As we progress through the project, my thesis will improve.
I commented on Anthony Saito
I commented on Anthony Saito
Deadline 6: Weekly Learning Reflection
This deadline made me aware of the strategies used when giving a public speech, whether its to make the audience feel someway or to get a certain reaction. This week we went over rhetorical strategies and how to spot those rhetorical strategies in our own readings.
“7.4 Draft Thesis Statements.”
1. Donald Trump undermines his fellow candidates, without very many credible sources and/or statistics.
2. Donald Trump replies on tricks to gaining the popular vote among U.S. citizens.
3. Donald Trump undermines his opponents by continuously talks about his business success, claiming the other candidates cannot run his businesses the way he can.
This was kind of tough, I don't know if my examples are good. I just want it to be the best that it can be but doing so is sort of difficult. Obviously the thesis is not final, it will be revised and finalized as we progress through the project.
2. Donald Trump replies on tricks to gaining the popular vote among U.S. citizens.
3. Donald Trump undermines his opponents by continuously talks about his business success, claiming the other candidates cannot run his businesses the way he can.
This was kind of tough, I don't know if my examples are good. I just want it to be the best that it can be but doing so is sort of difficult. Obviously the thesis is not final, it will be revised and finalized as we progress through the project.
“7.3 Analyzing My Audience for Project 2.”
1. Who am I writing for? What are the audience's beliefs and assumptions?
4. How might they react to my argument?
The audience is America. They value what is best for them and their country.
2. What position might they take on this issue? How will I need to respond to this position?
People obviously will like different candidates and will respond differently to every speaker.
3. What will they want to know?
They will want to know what the candidates plan is for different issues around the country.
4. How might they react to my argument?
People might react positively or negatively to my argument, it is based primarily on their preconceived notion of candidate Donald Trump.
5. How am I trying to relate to or connect with my audience?
I am just trying to show how the speakers try to win the debates and what strategies they use. I would like my audience to take what I have said and use that when watching other debates and be wary of the strategies.
6. Are there specific words, ideas, or modes of presentation that will help me relate to them in this way?
I think by using the word "us"/"America"/"home" it may help me connect to the audience.
“7.2 Cluster of 2015 GOP Debate”
Saturday, October 3, 2015
"6.7 Analyzing Rhetorical Strategies inFederal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name"
Appeals to Credibility or Character:
The author used credible sources as references and for statements. Thus, adding to his credibility.
Appeals to Emotion:
The author wants to make you feel sympathetic to the Native American community who is calling for change. He does a very good job of this by stating their values and beliefs and explains how it offends the tribe.
Appeals to Logic:
The author tries to appeal to emotion more than logic. Yes, he does do a good job of stating how wrong it is to offend another race but I believe he did a better job appealing to emotion.
The author used credible sources as references and for statements. Thus, adding to his credibility.
Appeals to Emotion:
The author wants to make you feel sympathetic to the Native American community who is calling for change. He does a very good job of this by stating their values and beliefs and explains how it offends the tribe.
Appeals to Logic:
The author tries to appeal to emotion more than logic. Yes, he does do a good job of stating how wrong it is to offend another race but I believe he did a better job appealing to emotion.
"6.6 Aanlyzing Message in Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name"
1. Express idea or opinion:
The author is trying to express the opinion of why the name should be changed.2. Inform the reader about a topic that is often misunderstood:
The author is trying to express the opinion of why the name should be changed.2. Inform the reader about a topic that is often misunderstood:
The author is trying to show why the Native American community wants the name to be changed.3. Persuade an audience of something?
The author is trying to persuade the readers to join in on the side of changing the name.
4. Change:
The author is trying to persuade you to call for change
5. Feel a certain way:
Wants to make you sympathize with the Native American community.
"6.5 Analyzing My Own Assumptions"
1. What cultural or social values, beliefs, etc., do we share with the society or culture in which the text was written? Why have they endured?
I think all people can relate to being courteous, aware, and understanding of offending someone especially when it comes to their race. That is something people are very touchy about in today's world and I think we can all relate.
2. What cultural or social values, beliefs, etc., do we not share? Why not?
I don't believe that we can necessarily say that we don't share any values that the article is talking about.
3. If the text is written in a culture distant or different from our own, what social values, beliefs, etc., connect to or reflect our own culture? What social values,beliefs, etc., can we not see in our own culture?
I believe that is it a pretty common social value/standard to be wary of the things you say and do so that you do not offend another person.
4. If the text is written in our culture but in a different historical time, how have social values, beliefs, etc., developed or changed over time?
I think if it was written in a different time period, more specifically the past, people might not care as much about the issue. It is not a bold statement to say that people are more racially wary than the past.
I think all people can relate to being courteous, aware, and understanding of offending someone especially when it comes to their race. That is something people are very touchy about in today's world and I think we can all relate.
2. What cultural or social values, beliefs, etc., do we not share? Why not?
I don't believe that we can necessarily say that we don't share any values that the article is talking about.
3. If the text is written in a culture distant or different from our own, what social values, beliefs, etc., connect to or reflect our own culture? What social values,beliefs, etc., can we not see in our own culture?
I believe that is it a pretty common social value/standard to be wary of the things you say and do so that you do not offend another person.
4. If the text is written in our culture but in a different historical time, how have social values, beliefs, etc., developed or changed over time?
I think if it was written in a different time period, more specifically the past, people might not care as much about the issue. It is not a bold statement to say that people are more racially wary than the past.
"6.4 Analyzing Audience in Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name"
I think the target audience is anyone who is interested in the matter. With that being said I could absolutely see this article particularly being for men as well since it does have to do with football and that is the main target audience of football.
"6.2 Cultural Analysis of Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow to Redskins Team Name"
1. Previewing-
2. Skim for cultural references- Article does make cultural references involving the Native American nation.
3. Skim for cultural values- Article does display the values of the opposing Native American nation.
After re-reading the article I was able to understand the cultural references and values that it was displaying. The author talks about how and why the team name is offensive to Native Americans.
2. Skim for cultural references- Article does make cultural references involving the Native American nation.
3. Skim for cultural values- Article does display the values of the opposing Native American nation.
After re-reading the article I was able to understand the cultural references and values that it was displaying. The author talks about how and why the team name is offensive to Native Americans.
Tuesday, September 29, 2015
"5.7 Developing a Research Question"
I will be analyzing the first GOP debate.
1. What are some of their views?
2. How did they're speech effect the crowd?
3. Who is the popular candidate?
1. What are some of their views?
2. How did they're speech effect the crowd?
3. Who is the popular candidate?
"5.6 Reflection of Project 1"
1. My main problem is finding the time to actually get the project done and not procrastinate the very little time I have available.
2. I think I found success with finding so much information on my topic. The internet has so much info on this certain topic.
3. I just put the arguments and points that both sides had made, usually through quotes.
4. This project was similar to a argumentative paper I had to write in high school, discussing both sides of a certain social issue.
5. This project required a lot more pre-writing than the past project I referenced.
6. The project obviously helps students with writing skills, which is useful in any discipline.
2. I think I found success with finding so much information on my topic. The internet has so much info on this certain topic.
3. I just put the arguments and points that both sides had made, usually through quotes.
4. This project was similar to a argumentative paper I had to write in high school, discussing both sides of a certain social issue.
5. This project required a lot more pre-writing than the past project I referenced.
6. The project obviously helps students with writing skills, which is useful in any discipline.
"5.3 Identifying Basic Grammar Patterns"
After doing this, it has become clear that I need to focus on some grammatical elements.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Z4-Rp5uBKl1cDLisTxTjDlLcE-1otAicOUYym65LXRc/edit?usp=sharing
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Z4-Rp5uBKl1cDLisTxTjDlLcE-1otAicOUYym65LXRc/edit?usp=sharing
Saturday, September 19, 2015
"4.10 Paragraph Analysis"
I learned that I am at a good starting point but there are things I could do to make my draft better. I think my strength is staying on point but I could use some help transitioning and I need to add more arguments within the paragraphs.
“Copy for Paragraph Analysis”
“Copy for Paragraph Analysis”
"4.8 Reflection on Project 1 Draft"
I reviewed Christopher Gentry's. Chris had a very good draft, using good in-text citations, properly acknowledging his audience, and providing good context throughout the draft. It showed me what I proper draft should look like, organization and context wise. The only thing I could comment on was that he didn't have headings for the sections, which I saw a lot in the examples of QRG's.
"4.3 Thoughts on Drafting"
The key to having a goof QRG, is having an attention grabbing thesis statement and interesting introduction. It is also important to keep a nice compact/organized look to your QRG. The purpose of a QRG is to be quick and informative so stay away from lengthy paragraphs as well.
I reviewed Cynthia Ramirez and Steve Duron. I agreed with everything that they both said and I actually said very similar things in my post.
I reviewed Cynthia Ramirez and Steve Duron. I agreed with everything that they both said and I actually said very similar things in my post.
Wednesday, September 16, 2015
"3.15 Draft of QRG"
Hello Classmates,
I chose to write about the Washington Redskin's Controversy. I would really like your thoughts and comments, not so much on the topic itself, but on my writing/formatting/etc. Thank you!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/11gAreaF_6Qyc-LS9X-00Gi9T8BHkyVtK71Moc1naD8U/edit?usp=sharing
I've completed revising my draft, based on the suggestions left on the original. Please look for anything you think can help my draft.
I chose to write about the Washington Redskin's Controversy. I would really like your thoughts and comments, not so much on the topic itself, but on my writing/formatting/etc. Thank you!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/11gAreaF_6Qyc-LS9X-00Gi9T8BHkyVtK71Moc1naD8U/edit?usp=sharing
I've completed revising my draft, based on the suggestions left on the original. Please look for anything you think can help my draft.
"3.7 QRGs: the Genre "
1. I would say the convention of this genre is to give a brief explanation of the given topic.
2. It's in many short paragraphs, to give a brief explanation on a wide subject.
3. The purpose seems to be to inform the readers
4. I would say the audience is anyone who is interested in the subject and wants to get a bit of information in a timely manner.
5. They use visuals very well, whether its to express a feeling or emotion, make the reader feel a certain way, or just to give a visual representation.
I see that majority of people wrote the same ideas that I had. My classmates and I pretty much had the same understanding of QRG;s.
I commented on Anthony Saito and Cynthia Ramirez.
2. It's in many short paragraphs, to give a brief explanation on a wide subject.
3. The purpose seems to be to inform the readers
4. I would say the audience is anyone who is interested in the subject and wants to get a bit of information in a timely manner.
5. They use visuals very well, whether its to express a feeling or emotion, make the reader feel a certain way, or just to give a visual representation.
I see that majority of people wrote the same ideas that I had. My classmates and I pretty much had the same understanding of QRG;s.
I commented on Anthony Saito and Cynthia Ramirez.
3.5 Cluster of Redskins Controversy"
In my cluster, I incorporated all of the major players in the controversy. I also showed subgroups within the cluster. Example: NFL (as a league) to the NFL fan base.
Saturday, September 5, 2015
“2.17 Annotated Bibliography in APA Style.”
Clarkson, G. (n.d.). Racial Imagery and Native Americans. Cardozo Journal of International and Comparative Law, 11, 393-393.
Pace, K. (n.d.). Washington Redskins Case and the Doctrine of Disparagement. Pepperdine Law Review, 22, 7-7.
Waldron, T. (n.d.). Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name. Retrieved September 5, 2015.
Waldron, T. (n.d.). California Advances Bill To Ban 'Redskins' Name. Retrieved September 5, 2015.
After looking at classmates posts, I realize I may not have completed this portion properly. I did not put the purpose of the article, as most students did.
http://thesilentinspiration.blogspot.com/2015/09/35-cluster-of-abortion-controversy.html?showComment=1442457808412#c4937788047369620398
http://oscarjunioracosta.blogspot.com/2015/09/217-annotated-bibliography-in-computer.html?showComment=1442457777043#c1749554873920509894
ESPN Outside the Lines Redskins Debate w/ Gyasi Ross and Dave Zirin. (n.d.). Retrieved September 17, 2015.
The purpose for this video was to have a debate on the topic. They got two people, who have different views on the subject to sit down and debate. I noticed both sides were trying to be respectful to each other and their views since it is a sensitive subject.
MOD POST: REDSKINS NAME CHANGE CONTROVERSY. AKA: STOP IT. • /r/Redskins. (n.d.). Retrieved September 17, 2015.
The purpose was to try to lessen the intensity of the subject. The author tries to be even keeled and tries to lessen the tension between the two opposing commenters.
Waldron, T. (n.d.). Federal Judge Delivers Another Legal Blow To 'Redskins' Team Name. Retrieved September 17, 2015.
The purpose of this article was to inform the readers on the process of getting the team name changed.
“2.13 Ideology in My Controversy.”
There are many people involved in the Washington Redskins Re-Branding Controversy. Players, fans, news reporters, Indian tribes, and the Redskin's management all are voicing their own opinion, in what seems like a never ending fight to change the logo/team name. Some of the major players in this controversy are Mike Wise (columnist for the Washington Post), Dan Steinberg (Author of the DC Sports Blog), Mike Florio (NBC's ProFootballTalk.com), and the Oneida Indian Nation (an Iroquois tribe indigenous to New York). All of these major players are for the re-branding of the team's name and logo. I would say all of these major players have a lot of power based on their following, but I think the most important player would have to be the Oneida Indian Nation. A key player on the opposite side would be Washington Redskin's General Manager, Dan Snyder. Dan Snyder, along with the partnering owners, are the ones who have publically denied the requests to change the team name and logo. I would say these people might actually hold the most power due to the fact that they alone have the power to change the team name/logo. It does not seem that these two sides/groups are listening to each other at all. Hence, the never ending argument for the re-branding of the team's logo/name.
Friday, September 4, 2015
“2.11 Evaluation of Social Media Sources.”
Credibility: My sources are from the Huffington Post and TYTSPORTS. Both these posts were not made by an individual, but by that companies or organizations twitter page.
Location: Neither of the posts have a visible location.
Network: They posted these articles on twitter and seem to be followed by others in their given field. Huffington Post is associated with other news companies, while TYTSPORTS is associated with other sports companies, such as ESPN.
Content: The posts do not cite any other sources, but have links to their own webpage with the full article.
Contextual Updates: Both of these sources post about subjects in their field, they do not solely focus on this one subject.
Age: The accounts have posted quite a bit so I would not say that they are new accounts.
Reliability: I would consider both of these sources to be reliable ones.
Location: Neither of the posts have a visible location.
Network: They posted these articles on twitter and seem to be followed by others in their given field. Huffington Post is associated with other news companies, while TYTSPORTS is associated with other sports companies, such as ESPN.
Content: The posts do not cite any other sources, but have links to their own webpage with the full article.
Contextual Updates: Both of these sources post about subjects in their field, they do not solely focus on this one subject.
Age: The accounts have posted quite a bit so I would not say that they are new accounts.
Reliability: I would consider both of these sources to be reliable ones.
“2.8 Evaluation of Scholarly Sources.”
Both of my scholarly sources are from the same website, heinonline.org. Both of these articles purpose is to inform and persuade the readers into calling for the change of the Washington Redskins team name and logo. Both of these journals are posted into the Law Journal Library on heinonline.org. The first journal was in the Pepperdine Law Review, while the other was published in the Cardozo Journal of International and Comparative Law. Both sources have incredible sources, such as, Georgetown University Law Center, Massachusetts Institute of Technology, Harvard University, Harvard Law School, and Rice University. The authors of the journals are Gavin Clarkson and Kimberly A. Pace. I would say the intended audience is some sort of legal committee who is in charge or has the power to order the Redskin's to change their name. I found it by using Google Scholar.
“2.6 Evaluation of General Sources.”
I choose to do research on the Washington Redskins controversy to change their team name. I have two sources, one from theguardian.com and the other from the huffingtonpost.com. Both display some great information but are very different in their own way.
URL: Both of these sources end in a .com. I guess that is fine but to me a more credible ending would be .edu, .org, or .gov.
Author: The Guardian and the Huffington Post both offer the names of that articles author, but the Guardian offers a quick bio when you click on his name, which the Huffington Post does not. The bio from the Guardian reads: "Timothy Spangler writes a weekly syndicated column on international affairs distributed by Creators. He also writes the Law of the Market blog for Forbes and is the section editor for business and finance at the Los Angeles Review of Books."
Last Updated: The Guardian was last updated June 26th, 2014. While the Huffington post was updated July 8th, 2015. Both websites links are all still relevant and work.
Purpose: Both of the sources seem to be purposed to inform the reader. Neither really promote any product or idea. They are actually pretty unbiased as well, presenting the arguments of both sides pretty fairly.
Graphics: There is only one graphic on both of these sources, and that graphic is the Washington Redskins helmet and logo. I think they are showing you what is being discussed and I don't think that they are trying to do anything by using that graphic.
Position on Subject: Like I said previously, the sources are very unbiased. They both present the arguments and facts of both sides. The purpose of the articles are to inform the reader and allow the reader to choose a side.
Links: The Guardian has links to other articles on their website that seem unrelated, while the Huffington Post has more relevant links to the subject.
URL: Both of these sources end in a .com. I guess that is fine but to me a more credible ending would be .edu, .org, or .gov.
Author: The Guardian and the Huffington Post both offer the names of that articles author, but the Guardian offers a quick bio when you click on his name, which the Huffington Post does not. The bio from the Guardian reads: "Timothy Spangler writes a weekly syndicated column on international affairs distributed by Creators. He also writes the Law of the Market blog for Forbes and is the section editor for business and finance at the Los Angeles Review of Books."
Last Updated: The Guardian was last updated June 26th, 2014. While the Huffington post was updated July 8th, 2015. Both websites links are all still relevant and work.
Purpose: Both of the sources seem to be purposed to inform the reader. Neither really promote any product or idea. They are actually pretty unbiased as well, presenting the arguments of both sides pretty fairly.
Graphics: There is only one graphic on both of these sources, and that graphic is the Washington Redskins helmet and logo. I think they are showing you what is being discussed and I don't think that they are trying to do anything by using that graphic.
Position on Subject: Like I said previously, the sources are very unbiased. They both present the arguments and facts of both sides. The purpose of the articles are to inform the reader and allow the reader to choose a side.
Links: The Guardian has links to other articles on their website that seem unrelated, while the Huffington Post has more relevant links to the subject.
Wednesday, September 2, 2015
"2.3 My Discipline"
1. Students, in my program, learn how to be successful in today's world of business. The program covers a wide range of topics, from economics to ethics and different business practices.
2. People with business degrees generally go on to work for a business, as corny as that sounds. It's true! Most of the students in my program have goals of working for a huge company and I would say that they probably get a little disappointed when they graduate because like any company, you have to start at the bottom and work your way up.
3. What drew me into business is solely because I cannot stand working for someone or taking orders from someone. It's just not who I am as a person. For me, I need to be in a leadership position that holds some power at all times, so the chance of owning my own company and being my own boss really excites me.
4. Well I am in business but I am more focused on sports business. So I would say a leader in sports business would have to be Jerry Colangelo. Colangelo took over the Phoenix Sun's in 1968 and brought the MLB to Phoenix as well, with the creation of the Diamondbacks. Colangelo also helped bring the Phoenix Coyotes and the Phoenix Mercury to the valley of the Sun. Currently he is the president of USA Basketball and is a real idol of mine.
5. A lot of the top journals in business come from the same publisher, the Academy of Management. So I'll pick different ones that way they aren't all from the same publisher. First, the top journal in business is the Academy of Management Journal published by the Academy of Management. Second, we have the Administrative Science Quarterly published by Cornell University. Finally, we have the American Economic Review published by American Economic Association.
Reflection:
After reading classmates goals and aspirations, it made me feel inadequate. Not knowing exactly what I want to do with my life. It is really interesting how people have a passion and drive for certain things.
http://thesilentinspiration.blogspot.com/2015/09/my-disciplinefield-of-study.html?showComment=1442457584991#c4198768337561189828
http://ponderingsofaspacecadet.blogspot.com/2015/09/23-my-major.html?showComment=1442457519736#c4385387272559000643
2. People with business degrees generally go on to work for a business, as corny as that sounds. It's true! Most of the students in my program have goals of working for a huge company and I would say that they probably get a little disappointed when they graduate because like any company, you have to start at the bottom and work your way up.
3. What drew me into business is solely because I cannot stand working for someone or taking orders from someone. It's just not who I am as a person. For me, I need to be in a leadership position that holds some power at all times, so the chance of owning my own company and being my own boss really excites me.
4. Well I am in business but I am more focused on sports business. So I would say a leader in sports business would have to be Jerry Colangelo. Colangelo took over the Phoenix Sun's in 1968 and brought the MLB to Phoenix as well, with the creation of the Diamondbacks. Colangelo also helped bring the Phoenix Coyotes and the Phoenix Mercury to the valley of the Sun. Currently he is the president of USA Basketball and is a real idol of mine.
5. A lot of the top journals in business come from the same publisher, the Academy of Management. So I'll pick different ones that way they aren't all from the same publisher. First, the top journal in business is the Academy of Management Journal published by the Academy of Management. Second, we have the Administrative Science Quarterly published by Cornell University. Finally, we have the American Economic Review published by American Economic Association.
Reflection:
After reading classmates goals and aspirations, it made me feel inadequate. Not knowing exactly what I want to do with my life. It is really interesting how people have a passion and drive for certain things.
http://thesilentinspiration.blogspot.com/2015/09/my-disciplinefield-of-study.html?showComment=1442457584991#c4198768337561189828
http://ponderingsofaspacecadet.blogspot.com/2015/09/23-my-major.html?showComment=1442457519736#c4385387272559000643
“1.8 My Writing Process.”
The type of writer, that I would consider myself to be, is a procrastinator. My writing process would also have to include being a heavy reviser. I have to write all of my ideas out on my first draft and then go back an edit the paper so that it makes more sense to readers. I would say that my writing process is both successful and unsuccessful. Whenever I do not procrastinate, I seem to be receiving higher grades due to the excess amount of time to revise my paper. However, that is not the case very often. I usually tend to forget about assignments or get too lazy to do them and have to rush last minute. I think it would be beneficial for me to not procrastinate and just continue to be a heavy revise
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| ClkerFreeVectorImages, "Winter Sleep Hibernation"
After reading comments on my own posts and leaving a few on others, I have a new perspective on the type of writer that I am. I always thought of being a procrastinator as a bad thing, but honestly its quite impressive that procrastinators can get their work done in a shortened amount of time. I commented on Liz Kinney's blog and Krissandra McNeill's blog
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Friday, August 28, 2015
“My Thoughts on Public Comments.”
- How would you describe the fears and anxieties being expressed in these comments? What are these commenters afraid of, specifically?
It seems like a lot of the fears and anxieties of the commenters were about things coming into our country. Whether that be imports or illegal immigrants, from Mexico more specifically.
- What kinds beliefs and values are represented in these comments? How would you characterize the kinds of values and beliefs being expressed in the comments?
Most people wanted to rebuild the American Dream in our country, by bringing jobs here and having new industrial revolution.
- Which commenters came across as the most reasonable? What made them seem reasonable?
I would say the first commenter came off as the most reasonable but submitted the comment as anonymous.
- Which commenters came across as lacking credibility or trustworthiness? Why didn’t they seem trustworthy?
After reading other classmates thoughts on public comments, I learned that they generally think just as I do. We agreed on how people who are unbiased come off as more trustworthy and how generally, people who know nothing about a certain subject are very prominent in getting their own view/point across.
http://cgentry1972.blogspot.com/2015/09/my-thoughts-on-public-comments.html?showComment=1441428006574
http://svicenti.blogspot.com/2015/08/my-thoughts-on-public-comments.html?showComment=1441428069116#c3019610855574598023
"1.10 UC Irvine Removes American Flag "
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"1.9 Calendar Reflection"
After completing my weekly calendar, I can now see that I am a very busy individual. With school, work, and rugby, I am constantly on the go. Having work on the weekends and rugby during the week will make getting homework done a little challenging...but not impossible. I have managed to allow myself 25 hours/time slots to do homework per week for all of my classes. With that amount of homework time, I should be able to keep my grades at a reasonable percentage. Now it is up to me and how much work I actually get done during those time slots or if I even follow through with it at all, since I am an extreme procrastinator. I do not think I will need all that time allowed by myself to complete all of my homework but it is nice to have it.
After reading and commenting on others posts, I don't feel as worried about the time I have allowed myself. It seems like I am pretty much the average when it comes to time per week dedicated to homework. At first, I thought that I had too much time but after seeing others posts, I now know that is not the case. I reviewed and commented on Oscar Acosta's blog and Deb Ortega's blog.
After reading and commenting on others posts, I don't feel as worried about the time I have allowed myself. It seems like I am pretty much the average when it comes to time per week dedicated to homework. At first, I thought that I had too much time but after seeing others posts, I now know that is not the case. I reviewed and commented on Oscar Acosta's blog and Deb Ortega's blog.
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